Empty Words.
she hung her head in sorrow
his callous words wounded so
she could not remember his kindness
as the newness of their love once was
talk, he talked on and on
so persistent in his tone so cruel
where was that love they had made
where were his once sweet kisses
washed away with the flux of her tears
now as he stood waiting for her answer
blinded by tears, she could not speak
where once promises of tender love
now remained his indifference
once whispered words of love forever
once gentle caresses folded around her
now seemed to interfere with his wants
they were not hers, his empty callous words
27 comments:
wow, simply powerful words here. You can feel the heartache. Just nicely done.
Very tough BD, because she still has love for him. I think I wouldn't have that love very long at all.
My song, borrowed from the Eagles:
But me, I'm already gone
And I'm feelin' strong
I will sing vict'ry song
'cause I'm already gone
Yes, I'm already gone
And I'm feelin' strong
I will sing this vict'ry song
'cause I'm already gone
Yes, I'm already gone
Already gone
All right, nighty-night
Been there, done that.
But I still cried.
And cried some more.
It's a sad world.
..
bd, so amazing. my favorite lines:
where were his once sweet kisses
washed away with the flux of her tears
So full of sorrow and hurt. Loved it.
very tentative...to only talk about his words...still simple and to the heart.
Words can really be empty sometimes, can't they? Lovely poem, thanks for sharing.
No one, no person, no animal should be treated this way.I'm angry at his persistent treatment of her, at the jail she is locked into, at the Cold quarters she's "living in. I bristle and Cry reading "interfere with his wants" as if she is a thing, as if she could prevent Circumstances she Cannot Control. Yes, "empty Callous words", a cruelty I Cannot Condone. (I purposefully Capitalized these C' and notice I did not capitalize the "c" in could.)
love,
gel
Amazing use of words here!!! Well done!!!
i've felt this before. well said!
Heartbreakingly beautiful.
beautifully said, sad too...as I know it..have felt it, so familiar these words....
Hi Beloved Dreamer,
I love your poetic style. The emotions expressed in this piece are both beautiful and raw at the same time.
Take care my poetic friend.
Dear Melanie--
This broke my heart open, and I didn't even know it had a film across it--
Thank you for these words, not empty nor callous--
Much thanks for your very kind words.
I look forward to your comments.
love-bd
Sweet Jim, me too. Been there done that. I know this song well. When I was in College, at St Johns I work for the newspaper. We got to go to all the concerts free and go backstage. I remember The Eagles well. Wasn't it a great time for life an music? Too bad we are older now but... wiser, No? Indeed it is a sad world. I live without the love I once had so long ago.
love-bd
Destine, one of my favorite lines also. So many kisses and so many tears go by with none to take notice. Much thanks for your kind comments
love-bd
PB, not knowing you well I would say you are young male still in search of love. Forgive me If I am wrong.
Life is tentative, my friend. I have traveled my path in life a little longer then you. You do not know what it is to be a women who still loves the one who loves not.
I do thank so much for stopping by and reading my poem I also love peoples feelings about what I have said.
love-bd
Rita, how true. In my life time I have heard a great deal of empty words. I guess that's my path in life. I hope more for you. Thanks for your kind comments.
love-bd
Ah Gel you know me too well and keep all my secrets my friend. Don't be angry dear, thank God for your wonderful life mate.
love, Melanie-bd
Brosreview, much thanks for your comment. I am glad you stopped by.
love-bd
Klaire, thank you so very much for your comment.
love-bd
Shadow my friend we have all been there. Only a lucky few have not. Thanks for your kind words.
love-bd
Nolle my dear, let us hope that you hear no more empty words in your sweet life. Thanks for stopping by.
love-bd
Hello my friend. so glad you stopped by to read my work. I love your site also. Your title "The Write Girl" can have so many meanings.
love-bd
Thank you Beth for your kind words. I think we have all been there once or twice.
love-bd
can't paint the sorrow in better way than by these words. so vulnerable and true.
I very much liked this. The way you've written this captures heartache that many of us have faced at one point or another in our lives. Good work.
well composed :)
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